REVIEW ON PAST PAPER ANALYSIS

Below are some improvements that i could make for my past paper essay that i got given back today. By taking into account these improvement i will hopefully be able to achieve a higher grade for the next essay i write.

Review of Disability Essay

- I should construct an opening of 2-3 sentences that are an overview of my framework. In this case, disability is shown in the representation of Ben who has Down's Syndrome and who is sheltered by his parents and is reluctantly protected by his brother.
- Specifically refer to Ben's disability, Down's Syndrome
- Refer to the term "editing"
- Give more detail about evolution scene as he talks about genetic failures - like Ben's disability
- Analyse what the voiceover reveals